As we all know by now with all the hoopla about global warming these days carbondioxide keeps the heat of the sun in our atmosphere. The carbondioxide level in our atmosphere is regulated by an interaction between plankton and volcanoes. The plankton acts like the amazon forest of the ocean and so it reduces the carbondioxide level. Once the plankton dies it sinks to the bottom of the ocean where the dead plankton is covered by sand. After millions of years the layers, in which the dead plankton is stored, will be moved under an active volcanoe, due to movement of the tectonic plates, and all the carbondioxide stored by the plankton will be released into our atmosphere and so it keeps the level of carbondioxide constant. So the next time a religious fool says to you that god let a volcanoe explode to punish us for our sins, you can now say “no Mother Nature is responsible for this disaster in order to keep our planet livable”.Timoty De Cleyn
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I have discovered a spelling mistake in my blog entry, the singular of volcanoes is not volcanoe but volcano
Dear Timoty,
First of all, I'm fond of the title of your blog. It really attracts the reader's attention and summarizes the story you're going to tell. Secondly, the topic is well chosen and hot from the press, so most people will be interested and start reading. You also alternate old information with new one, which makes the text readable.
It might not be a bad idea to condense your sentences next time because it reduces the clarity of your message. For example when you talk about the level of carbon dioxide, we all know that you mean the level of it in the atmosphere. Also the fifth sentence is too long. I'ld reduce the number of parenthetical clauses and split the sentence in two or more separate ones, especially because these sentence is the most important one of your blog. I also found some spelling mistakes like carbondioxide (carbon dioxide), god (God) and volcanoe (volcano) like you find out yourself.
Nevertheless, I enjoyed reading your text. Your clincher is well-thought-of and summarize the blog very well. My congratulations!
Joke De Geeter
What is there left to say... Joke basically covered all the bases.
Excellent information flow (zigzag)!
Just one thing: use 'viable' instead of 'livable' and you're there!
Olaf
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